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All Deviations


When the sun set,
There was still hope of light on the horizon.

It may be no Summer's day,
But there could have been warmth
And a light breeze.

The forecast for today is cloudy weather
Lightning, but not the interesting type.
This won't make a good photograph for
The National Geographic.

More likely to posted in a small column in the sun,
You're barely a flood now. Let alone a cyclone.
You lack the ability of surprise and grace.

As I mentioned,
There was some light on the horizon at first,
But it wasn't good enough for you.

And, like a child in a supermarket
Who's mother wouldn't buy her E numbers,
You fucking overreacted.
Again.

But instead of tearing the shelves down,
Something else collapsed -
Sympathy.

That rope didn't asphyxiate anything,
But it suffocated the day and the night.
You turned it into something unworthy
Of a title.

Acceptance:
It's a word you should learn,
If you get a chance.
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This used to be titled "Rain". It used to be a poem about my ex-girlfriend, when I was still with her. I think you can guess what it's about now.

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~the-grim-rita:iconthe-grim-rita: Apr 13, 2008, 10:12:45 AM
"Creep into me.
Once you've shared slumber,
Sleeping alone is pins and needles."

if that was ay more accurate i'd probably die.
i am right with you, pins and needles is the phrase.
you have such a way with words beautiful.
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~punkerbunker:iconpunkerbunker: Apr 13, 2008, 10:14:38 AM
YAY!
Thank you.
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~PaintWithMyBlood:iconPaintWithMyBlood: Apr 13, 2008, 2:12:05 PM
People yell at me when i analayse poetry too deeply

But it's really effective how...well almost everything is repeated....i'd normally tell the writer to think of new lines...but it works here....cos it's like you want it to last forever...be repeated.....happen again and again

One question is the rain the metephprical visualisation of tears....or is it just generally rain...i guess it workds either way.....

:)

Anyway!!! Enough rambling :P

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~punkerbunker:iconpunkerbunker: Apr 14, 2008, 4:49:12 AM
Thanks :)
I like your over-analysis.
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~PaintWithMyBlood:iconPaintWithMyBlood: Apr 14, 2008, 5:13:45 AM
Thank you...I think :p

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~69tea:icon69tea: Apr 14, 2008, 7:41:57 AM
Nice one Josh. I know how you feel.

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~punkerbunker:iconpunkerbunker: Apr 14, 2008, 7:46:41 AM
Thanks babes.
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~69tea:icon69tea: Apr 14, 2008, 7:51:22 AM
No problem.

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~Mollipop100:iconMollipop100: May 16, 2008, 4:16:07 AM
i hate it. *is in a jealous huff and really thinks its good but is angry cos you never speak to her*

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